Great image..I'd either crop out the out of focus/lighter area to her right or burn it in. The sharp focus area is so sharp and interesting (in both images)that the blurry area(s) mar(s) the effect.
Both images in my mind are very good. Both have several different potential "crops" that even might make for better presentations. I disagree with FC, I think the light works very well in the lower key image and for the model. I do not like the tranformation at the top of this image from the burn in to the lighter vertical portion of the wall. With a little fine tuning these two photographs could be even better than what we see here. I frankly like them both, and I have enjoyed looking at them very much.