While this is not a format for criticism, if you were to crop 1/3 from the right the resultant image just pops! The right side detracts from the image. Give it a try. It has potential.
Thanks. I will try a crop when I actually print this. I went to print it earlier this week but my Ilford MG developer came out of the bottle looking like Coke so this is just a negative scan. I am getting some more dev. today so if it works, I will scan the print and replace the image here.
Added Later: I have up loaded it again cropping out the distracting bits in the corner.