Icicles

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  Kevin Caulfield

• Mar 7, 2005

I'd say it very nearly works. You've definitely isolated the ice, but we need to see a bit more of the river. From your description, that would have been difficult to achieve.

 

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  blackmelas

• Mar 8, 2005

I like it. It's a very nice abstract composition but I'm not sure where my eye is supposed to go. I might suggest the opposite of Kevin and see less river. Perhaps crop square a little bottom (the one blade of grass and the unsharp stone bothers me a bit) and left (I see too much black), then increase contrast some to see the wetness of the ice glow more. Perhaps that not your intent however...
Best regards,
James

 

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  jonogmun

• Mar 8, 2005

Hi Kevin and James,

Thanks for your comments. I was actually trying to make the ice stand our and glow. The problem that I saw when I tried to crop the lower part (horizontal grass and rocks) is that I felt the ice lost context somehow. I wanted to show it clearly against the very dark background of the river.

 

• BWGirl

• Mar 8, 2005

I love it actually. But itwould look very nice as a square...maybe a wee bit off the left... so there you have everything! Different people...different tastes!

 

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  chuck94022

• Mar 8, 2005

Perhaps you could bring *everything* up a bit. For the ice to really pop, the specular-ish highlights probably need to be really white, and the black area may be a bit too black. So if everything came up a bit, you might achieve what you are seeking. I think it has great potential.

-chuck

 

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  jonogmun

• Mar 9, 2005

Thank you Jeanette and Chuck for your constructive criticism. Looks like I will be busy in the darkroom for a while.

 

• rhphoto

• Mar 11, 2005

Looks like the actual print has enough detail in the river to be recognizable. I'd burn down the bottom right corner, and the upper right corner - and the lower left corner too. Just bring all that non-crucial information down a zone or two. I like the cropping - compostion. But I think burning down those areas might draw the eye into the ice more. And I think your basic contrast and exposure are fine.