Darlene At Main Beach

Vincent Brady · Jul 2, 2010

While your exposure is excellent and the moment is the correct one to take the photograph, the presence of the sunglasses destroys any connection between the viewer and the model. The eyes are are windows to the soul and to hide them places a barrier there and prevents any intimacy. This is of course but my opinion.

mjs · Jul 2, 2010

Sunglasses could also create mystery and distance. Perhaps intimacy wasn't what was intended?

k.hendrik · Jul 2, 2010

a classic snapshot

bryanlc · Jul 2, 2010

Vincent Brady (TEX) said:
While your exposure is excellent and the moment is the correct one to take the photograph, the presence of the sunglasses destroys any connection between the viewer and the model. The eyes are are windows to the soul and to hide them places a barrier there and prevents any intimacy. This is of course but my opinion.

Thanks so much for thoughtful critique. My wife is a reluctant subject.. that said I will make an effort to get the glasses off in the future......

JMcLaug351 · Jul 3, 2010

Excellent shot considering the harsh light. From this shot and the other one you have posted it looks to be about noon time. Harsh light for a portrait. I might have tried to put her somewher near the building in the background of the second shot. I would have tried to have her stand or sit in a place where the sun was reflected off that building but just out of the frame. Use the building as one big reflector for fill light. It might have taken a bit of planning but it might have helped. After all it's really "all about light".
Hope this helps a bit. Oh, and one other thing, the camera should have been just a bit higher. Just my "two cents".
JOHN

bryanlc · Jul 3, 2010

JMcLaug351 said:
Excellent shot considering the harsh light. From this shot and the other one you have posted it looks to be about noon time. Harsh light for a portrait. I might have tried to put her somewher near the building in the background of the second shot. I would have tried to have her stand or sit in a place where the sun was reflected off that building but just out of the frame. Use the building as one big reflector for fill light. It might have taken a bit of planning but it might have helped. After all it's really "all about light".
Hope this helps a bit. Oh, and one other thing, the camera should have been just a bit higher. Just my "two cents".
JOHN

Awesome critique ! Thanks and I will think of the reflector possibilities in the future.

pentaxuser · Jul 3, 2010

I think this looks terrific as it is. In my opinion you will be hard pressed to improve on this, no matter where or when. On an impact level you have caught the model at her best which is at her most natural and this comes across. Naturalness is not always an easy thing to capture with a non professional model. On my monitor there is even just a hint of the eyes behind the glasses. If the prints shows the eyes slightly better then you have a real classic here.

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