Back to the picture...and one thing that I believe makes the earlier picture stronger is that for me, focusing a Holga is still hit or miss and the point of focus is where I'd want it in the earlier image and isn't in this one.
As already said above, I feel more diffusive light in first photo more attractive, as already said above, it is not so important if you are looking for development process. I have very minor expirience with DBI on sheet films, because I got from one old lady two 25 sheet boxes of old ORWO 125 film. Didn't know anything about I went to darkroom and started developing with short (submarine green lamp) inspections, terrible. I feel, that it needs long preparation of eyes in complete darkness. If you are working in ordinary daylight time, the eyes need long time to accomodate. I will very shortly post result of test, nothing special, but something I developed .
I like the light and general feel of this image better than the first -- in only that it feels more "Hoga-ish" due the focus. Also the light source (and its direction) feels to be a better match for the concrete walls. As the viewer, I don't want this photograph to be lit perfectly nor focused perfectly. The lower corners hidden by the dark add a lot.